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There’s this girl



There’s this girl
And she smiles like Heaven.
Better than Heaven,
Warmer still and with temperatures
In the high forties;
Warmer than a fireplace.

There’s this girl,
Who says sinuous things, sentences
Rife with emotive, heart-in-breast-pocket sentiments
With an “all ages” sticker, easily comprehended
and still impossible to understand
a single thing she says,
like Joyce and his moocows.

There’s this girl worth thinking about,
This girl that used to make
Doing this easier,
Simpler,
Musing my mind into many metaphors,
Mostly maniacal, but maybe methodical.

There’s this girl beyond Oxfords definition,
Or Webster’s for that matter,
And I should love to paint her,
To give to her face and the mind it hides
The immortality that God promises.
Generations should know this girl I know,
And then no one would care about that Mona Lisa.

There’s this girl,
With brown hair,
And brown eyes, ten fingers
And ten toes that I’ve never seen
But can guess at from the contour of her socks.
There’s this girl,
Just this girl, another testament to God or Science or some spiritual genius,
Just another anatomy now and autopsy later.
But if she ever tries to convince you she’s just another girl,
Don’t let her.
©2004-2009 ~chaosboy
:iconchaosboy:

Author's Comments

I haven't really written poetry in a while. I'm feeling a bit rusty. If you'll excuse the cliches and all, please do. Cliches are cliches for a reason right?

Simple, happy, and for certain members of my very esteemed and tiny audience, absolutely no angst! Woo!

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:iconjustb:
wow. you must really be into this girl. Great!!

--
"I've taken enough walks alone
to know how real nothing is."
~dystopian-dream-girl
:iconbruisedapple:
First of all...screenshot? Great choice. I want those shoes. But that's probably completely unrelated to your poem isn't it? I'm sorry.

I love the no angst. And I really enjoyed reading it. And I'm scared to say anything else because John will make fun of me in a mean comment later. Let him tell you how good it is.

--
~As I said before, I never repeat myself

That's right. You heard me.
:iconpachunka:
I thuoght the same about the graphic- which is a shame- 'cause I love it. :) Unless I'm wrong on that- fix me if 'tis true.

Fine ending. I enjoyed it- 'cept for some bit of the second last verse- but i think that's my lack of concentration kicking in. Should've eaten Shreddies. Yep.
:icontaye:
*Gets all professional-like and contemplates for a moment or two, stroking my chin a few times*.....BRILLIANT!!!!!

--
It's the new phase, new wave,
Dance craze, anyways,
It's still rock and roll to me.
:iconlilangelicdevil:
I love the way you go about describing this girl. different, but you get a sense of the emotions that play around her, when you think or see her, rather than what she looks like, or sounds like or anything like that. You got into the mental and emotional rather than physical, i like that. the metaphors worked well to, it was realistic, not over exagurated not embellished, it just was. it works. i like. serious props, i think ill actually fav this one, dont normally for poems.loved the endingn too.
Great job!

--
lilangelicdevil
*Fear is the mind killer. I will face my fear and let it pass through me*
:icon-tank:
i haven't read anything on DA in a while...im glad i started again with this...i didnt really like the first verse....but the rest of it was really amazing....it made me want to keep reading....great work :)
-tank

-=don't fear to imagine=-

--
'To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important, sacred or valuable. To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility.'
-Kurt Kobain
:iconx-x-sabrina-x-x:
oh wow......thats all i can seem to say right this second...........................that is amazing. i love it. it explains things so well. definitely +fav
:iconmizz-messed-up:
it's a big city poem.
feels to me like a splash of cold ice water at a date gone horribly wrong when that girl misinterprets something you've said.


certainly beautiful and striking. you've got a flair for the words and they love you and your mind. this is simply...
great.

"just another anatomy now and an autopsy later."
:iconares1013:
I like this a lot...it sounds almost ska-ish.. [sorry, the way I originally got into poetry was by writing songs..so I sorta hear/read everything and just automatically pick a genre for it] ...in the way it rambles on from one thought to another with the same underlying theme 'this girl'...great work.

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