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Contemporary Architecture, the Deconstructing of.



Skip the trip
To by your sculpted bedside marvel, modern
Monotony marching along fluting carved Greco Roman tubing
reaching like Ferrari fast on freeway moving
Like light, speed in skyscraping height races
Cloud tickling competition and simplistic radio towers winning,

Humble foundations becoming arrogant buildings.

Snap of fingers
Like pencils sharpened scratching, marking making,
Making markings on translucent pulp paper,
Lines hard to touches and corners rounded
Sand paper smoothing obvious imperfections
So devoid of feeling and oblivious to insecurity,
Ignorance being bliss as architectural ideology.
Curves like spirals winding
Staircases biding time to reach heaven on inch thick platforms crying porcelain white and tears for tying
Memoirs like notebooks with spiral plastic binding.

Columns scream Colossus
Legs stoic like Hellenistic Apollo breaching harbors,
A statement for Rome and people punch drunk off spiked punch indulgence candy, pupils dilated to stomach size
and growing as floor counts increase with
furniture in corners folded looking strangely Venetian.

Modern architecture, humble as gods
With fireballs and claps for the cracking
Of tunnels under channels, newly built aero plane
Crashing in a city suffocated by curlicues
And ice hard lines, spiraling like drills.
©2003-2009 ~chaosboy
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Author's Comments

Architecture is wonderful stuff.

I enjoyed toying with this one. It's different for me, but I don't mind. Although different on this site tends to mean bad these days.

Hmmmm....

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:iconfallacies:
The image for this piece is a trip in itself. Absolutely lovely, I thought actually that this was simply a visual piece for a moment their. The poem is equally sharp, as in keen, and good. The imagery is crisp, its stacatto but it still fits together like a good scherzo. Takes a bit of an education to understand, perhaps more than I have. Very well pieced together.

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:iconaenim-a:
wow man...
really descriptive...

but i get the feeling of someone in this...
or more.. may people.. ike aplace a milion people walked...
well doen man

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comment, to get comments.
share your kindness, not your hate.
love the art, before yourself.

meditate on this. [link]
:iconwicked-eve:
I told you once already what i thought of this hon but ill do it again...
This is brilliant...
the way you express yourself and your ideas..my god...its spectacular...
this however is one of your better pieces of writing...
it IS a poem...in every sense of the word.
Who cares what other people think as long as your satisfied with how its written...i mean its nice to get people's thoughts and approval...but the only person you need to have enjoy something you write with passion is yourself.
Change is always good no matter the technique...this is an amazing change for you!! +fav
Excellent writing hon! :) (Smile)
:icontmpst24myst:
Yes, this is different for you, but it still holds your style and talent. It's good to try new things and this, given that it's different, you kept your craft within. Good poets can achive this.

Heart

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:iconapricotafterthot:
I looovvvve alliteration.
It flows.
It's visual.

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"Information is not knowledge. Knowledge is not wisdom. Wisdom is not truth. Truth is not beauty. Beauty is not love. Love is not music. Music is the best." -Frank Zappa
:icon-tank:
i love the imagery...this really reminds me of a chilli peppers kinda song, i had the 'cant stop' beat in my head while reading this...great work
-tank

-=don't fear to imagine=-

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'To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important, sacred or valuable. To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility.'
-Kurt Kobain
:icondrippingblood:

i don't think this is different from reason being i hardly know you as a man and i think that different is a very trite thing to say but blah yeah more people should expect different things from people and not be shooked. this piece is really descriptive--this is wonderful stuff




Although different on this site tends to mean bad these days.

i couldn't agree with you more
:iconsenorphrog:
Man, this is incredible...Some of the best, most novel anti-rhyme-scheming I've seen in a while. It's just so unique, in its format, but also well executed, which makes it worth the read entirely. You can kind of see a fly-by of the architecture, almost as though it's forming itself in the process, amongst wording just as careful and elaborate as the structures it describes. At certain points, I even noted a little bit of Suess flavor, Twisted Suess, if that makes any sense. The reversed verb syntax really boosts the effect of it all. Great work, man, I'm glad you're on my devwatch :D (Big Grin)
:iconmastermindg:
a few too many similies, but its cool nonetheless.

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